University of Winchester have very kindly offered to give you feedback on your personal statements:
1) Email your personal statement to Lucy Mcdonagh at Lucy.McDonagh@winchester.ac.uk, explaining that you are from KGA and kindly asking to take up her offer of giving you feedback
2) Email Lucy Mcdonagh at Lucy.McDonagh@winchester.ac.uk to arrange
a Microsoft Teams session where she can offer a 121 session for students and give you direct feedback. (having the personal statement e-mailed through beforehand).
This support is here to help you - make the most of it and ensure your university application is to a high quality.